for JS
The first thing I told you
was that I did not need a teacher,
and you laughed and told me
I was ripe. Why did I call?
I knew my world was broken
beyond my ability to fix it,
though I still believed there
was something to fix,
and you led me to this place
where all that is dejected, rejected,
crashed and crushed is just
as it is meant to be. And in every
broken moment, wonder. In every
defeated now, possibility. Lead me.
I love how we laugh through tears each time
I see how I’ve fooled myself. Again.
How you make it a gift to be a fool.
I love how you see through
all the veils I have hung and
allow them to drop, no tugging,
no cutting, just letting them
fall as they will until I shine
like a moon in your sun. When I asked
you to be my teacher, I did
not yet know it would be you.
of course you realize the moon has no light of its own, that it merely returns a small portion of what the sun offers. oh, wait! i think that was your full point, exactly. :~)
🙂 …. hope you had a safe drive home eduardo.
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The falling veils make a great showing in this poem as image, such a seductive metaphor. I’m not sure I’m clear about the ending lines here. The phrasing seems to imply some deeper idea I’m not getting. To me, all it says is that when I asked you I did not yet know how things would turn out. Maybe that’s all you want to get at, but then I would so like to end on the word “sun”
I was also so unsatisfied with the end, but ran out of time … Wanted to leave it in a not knowing place, but didn’t quite get it right … Will work on that one. Thanks …