the snowmen
make it look
easy
to lose the self
they do not
ask how
nor does
the sun
ask permission
to help
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December 27, 2011 by Rosemerry
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December 27, 2011 by Rosemerry
the snowmen
make it look
easy
to lose the self
they do not
ask how
nor does
the sun
ask permission
to help
“To lose the self” is a good connection with snowmen. My only suggestion before it melts away is to eliminate that phrase “to help” which just seems to hang on the end of the poem. Maybe even, without that line, shift the first stanza to three lines, adding the extra to number two.