Sometimes for no reason
a sweetness comes. A pink scent,
perhaps, just beyond a fence,
or the particular way that a friend
says your name. It never lasts,
and it usually passes too quickly to name,
but for that moment the body opens
to meet whatever the sweetness is—
the way the low light moves across
the field or the fragrance of rain—
and though nothing changes,
the world is a much different place.
Imagine we could constellate our lives
on these points of sweetness—
such a different kind of mapping
that would be—a life not told
in highs and lows but in the subtler
tones—the times we turned our heads
or breathed in more fully, or closed
our eyes so we might better notice
a taste. The times our hearts skip
a beat, like tiny silent thank you notes.
“…a sweetness comes…” I like the phrase, better than any boon or gift or such.
The line that’s a sweetness for me is “Imagine we could constellate our lives
on these points of sweetness…” I might suggest editing out the words “to name” at the end of line 6, as it reads better, doesn’t repeat the word Name from the previous line.
So right! Thank you!
On 6/23/14, 7:09 PM, “comment-reply@wordpress.com” wrote:
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Great!
thank you, Geo, for reading it
With pleasure!