I deserve better
said the lock to the oar.
You never thank me
for holding you close.
I deserve more
said the oar to the boat.
You never praise
how I move you along.
I deserve warmth
said the boat to the river
you are always so cold,
so cold.
And the river said nothing,
nothing at all
and it kissed the earth
as it flowed.
I’m curious about the title, the 60%. Is that also the portion of water in the human body? Anyway, it’s interesting, especially upon reading the last stanza. The form is very fable-like, which I like. The river is of course at the bottom of it all.
You are so right about the human body that was my point. I figure at my best, I am 60 percent of the time able to be as generous as water 🙂
xo
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Nice, “as generous as”…
Lao Tzu does repeatedly tell us to follow the “water course way.”
At my best, like this poem, I’m grateful (maybe) twenty-five percent of the time.