I like the juxtaposition of “Go Vey Slow” and “the quickening heart.” Then a heart quickened is quite to reason to sloooooow doooooooownm.
I think the starting line should be drawn on the open heart; but then you have a pair of poems, each ending with “heart,” which lessens the punch of both poems.
This is absolutely brilliant..:-)
I like the juxtaposition of “Go Vey Slow” and “the quickening heart.” Then a heart quickened is quite to reason to sloooooow doooooooownm.
I think the starting line should be drawn on the open heart; but then you have a pair of poems, each ending with “heart,” which lessens the punch of both poems.