thanks dear Betsy for your warm responseyes to the many ways we need each other! Love r
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Hmmm I see what you mean. I am into writing monostitches these days I wish it were a slant rhyme, and almost made it ³there¹ instead of ³here,² but decided the immediacy was more important than the sound. Good griefso much goes into so few words. It¹s hilarious, really, how much energy and time I spend thinking about these things. Thank you for considering them with me.
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Yes, I think we are more use to “there” following “were.” However, I do like the immediacy, as you say, of “here.” How it makes the moment, and when the poem takes place, now. Re: “…how much energy and time [we] spend thinking about these things,” Thomas Mann put it exactly when he said, “A writer is someone for whom writing is more difficult than it is for other people.” We can let it go; we continue mucking with it, persistently striving to improve it, to make it say more closely what we’re trying to say.
And thank you for gifting us poems worth of being considered and thought about.
Yes, Rosemerry!!!!
thanks dear Betsy for your warm responseyes to the many ways we need each other! Love r
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Liking this one; but I’m thinking it’d be even better as a couplet
(making of myself a nest to hold your fear
I grow wings I didn’t know were here).
That said, this has a groovy rhythm to it.
Hmmm I see what you mean. I am into writing monostitches these days I wish it were a slant rhyme, and almost made it ³there¹ instead of ³here,² but decided the immediacy was more important than the sound. Good griefso much goes into so few words. It¹s hilarious, really, how much energy and time I spend thinking about these things. Thank you for considering them with me.
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Yes, I think we are more use to “there” following “were.” However, I do like the immediacy, as you say, of “here.” How it makes the moment, and when the poem takes place, now. Re: “…how much energy and time [we] spend thinking about these things,” Thomas Mann put it exactly when he said, “A writer is someone for whom writing is more difficult than it is for other people.” We can let it go; we continue mucking with it, persistently striving to improve it, to make it say more closely what we’re trying to say.
And thank you for gifting us poems worth of being considered and thought about.